Theme Fridays - Independence
Posted on July 4, 2008 - Filed Under original fiction, theme fridays, writing
She dreams her independence in lyrical escape. Safely sheltered in butteflies and perfumed meadows. She is free-born and self-possessed. Nestled in sunshine embraces and azure admiration.
In the quiet still of imagination’s repertoire, she tries on the mantle of dancer, piper and earth-bound saint. Of beachcomber and poet. A lovely face among the crowd, strolling the shops and drinking iced lattes. A traveler in the throes of life’s adventures and delights. An amazon warrier who champions the weak and unloved.
She stops to sit by a whispering lake that is still as glass and pure with truth. “May I stay here?” she asks. And then, like her dream, independence dissolves. The lake replaced with a bathroom mirror that reports two-fisted violence. Whose calling card says, anger and hate. That leaves its mark in greens, blues and deep violet.
And before she can recapture her dream and freedom’s wings, a door slams. Now. The nightmare. Returns.
Christine expresses her Independence here and Jess expresses hers, here.
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oooh!!! I like this. I really like your take on Independence. I woke up this morning, and wanted to see yours and christine’s. Before coffee, even.
Queen of dweebs…
Thanks, J. I was trolling at 1 a.m. to yours and c’s. So who is the bigger dweeb?
Annie
This is poignant, Chica.
i like how the subject is both independent and trapped at the same time.
There is great imagery throughout- all of it working together to that surprising end to make it even more of a shock.
Well written, sad, powerful. Excellent job, Annie. Excellent.
Hey Chica,
You know, it’s funny because I didn’t expect this to come out of the prompt. I really thought I’d end up doing something about the 4th - but the muse had her own ideas. It’s one of the things I’m really enjoying about this is that it keeps surprising me.
Annie
WC: Wow. Soothing, cooling imagery shattered by a hellish reality. Powerful and poignant!
- JOS
Thank you, JOS. Wow, I feel a teensy bit swooned over.
WC
I don’t even know what to say. This one that starts out so beautifully and then you want to cry for the poor girl’s reality. You did a great job on this one. I love Theme Fridays.I love the picture you chose to go with it too.
Hey Joanie,
You know, you’ve sort of become my ‘gut check’ on these things - your reaction means a lot to me. This is a whole new thing for us girls - well, at least for me - using a prompt and letting it take me where it does. I’m really enjoying it because it’s taking me to places I wouldn’t ordinarily travel.
Hugs,
Annie
powerful real a modern day fairy tale complete
with beautifulnature and a women trapped with her
familiar horrors.
Hi Jade & welcome,
I think your description is really spot on. It’s funny what prompts will elicit from a writer’s mind, eh? BTW, I loved your poetry. Shot you an email.
WC
Intriguing, disturbing, and disquieting. So few words, yet so much is implied. Well done.
-smith
Well, thank you, Mr. Smith.
A
This sent a shiver up my spine. Amazing imagery you’ve created there.
Thanks Gem! It’s darker than I expected it to be but I think the contrast between our imaginations and reality are often that huge. Sadly, so in some cases.
Annie
Safely sheltered in butteflies and perfumed meadows
That won me. Great visual…
Took me a while to get back to this..like half a day…sorry hon
Thanks, sweetie -I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Annie